An IELTS writing section key strategy video by aehelp.com. The first 1000 people who click the link will get one free month of Skillshare Premium: https://skl.sh/academicenglishhelp08211 This video gives information about common student mistakes in Task 2 of the Academic and General IELTS exams. It also explains what you need to write in order to get a band 7 to 9 on the Writing Section. To get lots more help, join our Premium IELTS course at https://www.aehelp.com/full-course/ The video will help you navigate your studies to get a band 7, 8, and 9 through building the language and communication skills necessary for success on the exam. This series will teach you the skills that will help you to be successful, confident and to reach success on these questions during the speaking interview. Follow the instructions carefully and make sure to practice. This video is sponsored by Skillshare.
See a list of conjunctions: https://www.aehelp.com/blog/2020/09/03/ielts-band-9-linking-words-connectives/
Question
Many people drive personal vehicles to school and work. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this type of transportation? Discuss both and give your own opinion.
Band 6.5 Essay
A lot of individuals take their cars to school and business. This essay will discuss the benefits and demerits of this mode of travel, and I will give my own opinion.
On the one hand, cars create a lot of traffic and pollution. Since petrol is needed by automobiles for power, they create a lot of smog in order to get the drivers and passengers to their destination. In fact, so much air pollution has been created over the past century by cars that there are now holes in the ozone layer which leads to getting skin cancer and killing flora and fauna. A recent article in the New York Times stated that each year 100 different plants and animals die because of the smog caused by car fumes. Also, there is a lot of heavy traffic in big cities because of many people driving cars. These are clearly disadvantages of using a personal vehicle.
On the other hand, there are many advantages to using a car like saving time and being comfortable. Automobiles are very fast compared to walking or even taking the bus. It can take a person one hour to get to work by bus, but only 20 minutes to reach their job when driving their car. Also, it is private, air-conditioned, and they can listen to their choice of music. For these reasons, I prefer to drive my car to work. I enjoy listening to jazz music, and I get to my job in just ten minutes. These are the merits of driving a personal vehicle.
In conclusion, many people drive cars to educational institutions and workplaces. There are advantages and disadvantages, but I think the benefits are more.
Band 9 Essay
Millions of cars take commuters to work and school daily all over the world. Over the past century, automobiles have played a critical role in the modernization of nations, as well as the transformation of infrastructure and the environment. The well-being of current and future generations is dependent on the ways in which society and individuals understand the impact of using personal vehicles for everyday driving. The disadvantages of cars are pollution and traffic; however, they benefit commuters by providing time and comfort.
Arguably, much of the air pollution, especially smog in large metropolitan cities, has been created by the constant use of vehicles to move from home to the office and classroom. The ozone layer has thinned and many species of animals and plants have suffered from the soot, a byproduct, created by the burning of fossil fuels used to power cars. A recent research study has discovered that the ozone layer has been depleted by as much as 50% over the past century, and it is unable to recover as a result of carbon emissions. Although these are negatives of using cars, I believe there are solutions to such problems and the benefits of personal vehicles are greater.
With the advancement of technology, many vehicles are now electric powered rather than burning petrol. At the same time, using a car saves precious time for commuters to reach their work and school. Furthermore, commuters can feel comfortable in a climate-controlled environment without the distraction of strangers, like on a city bus. This added convenience greatly helps to improve motorists’ quality of life and therefore stay positive and productive throughout the workweek. For these very reasons, I prefer to take my own car to my place of employment. These advantages help to maintain progress and integrity in societies.
In conclusion, the debate of using cars for everyday needs is an important one. It is necessary for authorities to discern the negatives of this technology, such as air pollution and traffic, in order to improve on these while maintaining the positives of efficiency and comfort. In the future, both people and nature must be taken into consideration with regard to private vehicle commute.
@zebinisoabduhalimova64533 years agoHello, teacher it would be better if you could show that what kind of linking words should be used in writing task 2. Instead of, on the one hand" on the otherect. 5
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@mabimohebi4253 years agoI like how accurate he is teaching us to improve our writing, he is a wonderful teacher. 10
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@happysaini58723 years agoThank you dear sir for providing this amazing video! 1
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@oceanman36763 years agoYou gave me accurateknowledge for free, i don' t know how to thank you enough. 2
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@stephanestephane42913 years agoThanks for this video where can i find your list of subordinating conjunctions? 6
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@quinnfabray89193 years agoThank u! I' m watching all of your videos and practicing myand speaking. However, it' s so hard to start writing an essay. I i' ll fix it as soon as possible! I have 2 months to pass ielts. ...Expand5
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@mori42813 years agoThank you so much for this great tip! You are the best!
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@muhammadalimahkamboyev41663 years agoThank you so much, all your videos are really helpful, and i get a lot, please make such great and useful videos often.
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@zulfiyafaxriddinova16363 years agoYou' re the best. Thanks a lot. Keep helping us.
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@saitamasensei60933 years agoI can' t thank you enough, sir. i have been struggling in getting a high writing mark since middle-school. so i thought, going to high-school this video makes everything clear, these unrecognizable mistakes had imperceptibly dragged my marks down. even though i have ok grammar, good amount of vocabulary, and a ton of ideas. all i lacked was something that would glue them together to make an essay, a structure, a uniquestyle of writing. this is what i have been looking for; some fresh air outside of my box, my comfort zone. the essays in the description are great, but i need help analyzing. could you please make a lesson on analyzing essays? if you already posted a video please reply the link. thank you in advance. ...Expand1
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@juiinaaya78413 years agoVeryyou very much you are the best ielts teacher i have ever seen. 4
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@ieltswritingclass58003 years agoSome good tips here, i' ve been teaching ielts for over 10 years and my students have had best results with similar tips.
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@jasur73973 years agoThanks a lot. I am really interested in joining your premium package. I might become a member soon. 1
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@javlonbektoxirov16613 years agoYet, we should use contrast linkers in discussion essay, i think.
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@bangtanismplaysgames79933 years agoHi aehelp, i wanna ask if you wrote that thesis right in the beginning then will you gonna repeat again in the body paragraph?
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@saeid98003 years agoThank you for your informative video. You said we shouldn' t use first, second, third, finally in essays, but you didn' t say what we should use. ...Expand3
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@devilase3 years agoHi, i love your videos. I' m wondering that can you make some videos about how to get a band 8 in writing, some tips and strategies would help (i' m . ...Expand
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@tandungphan16243 years agoThank you for sharing these tips. I hope you make videos like this rather than making live videos. 1
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@javlonbektoxirov16613 years agoBut simon used" secondly" andmany times in his band 9 essays. please, do not get me wrong. I am a bit confused. Therefore, i asked. 22
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@kirankoyyagura89863 years agoHi sir, how are you? i just want to know whether i can use " by way ofinstead of " in. Which is appropriate for high band?
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@yogeshsharma-ei1ce3 years agoHello sir, do you provide writing assessment and feedback facility for students?
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@bakchodimattkarlaude3 years agoHello! just wanted to ask a question regarding the writing part 2. So point to be, to complete the task 2, i tried to write ' over there'. ...Expand
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@quochuy92823 years agoI' ve read a lot of simon' s essays, some of them used on the one hand, on the other hand, and he still got a band 9 in writing. Could you elucidate this? I' m so confused.
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@deliciousrecipes53103 years agoThanku so much sir bcauz i got 6. 5 overall by watching some fantastic lessons from urr channel. 1
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@ahmedsiam15283 years agoOh godawful! i didn' t get conjunction list in description.
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@ngohuybach10243 years agoDear adrian, can u tell me the reason why at home i scored up to 7. 5 or 8. 0 in lis but when i did a test at my extra class, i just scored about 6, 0 or . ...Expand1
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@rajdeepalisha69363 years agoCan we use a particular word more than three times? is it good for high score?
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@sanigasanthosh19933 years agoSir i am really confused because a few of the points that you mentioned are what my tutor suggested to do. also is it right to use in my mind instead of for instance. 1
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@paramgrover78603 years agoYou' re vdeoz are very helpful to us.
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@dayana95023 years agoI can' t believe i actually used all the templates shown in this video and thought i' d get a band 8 well i saw this right on time, my ielts is in like. 4 days.
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@connect2satyendra3 years ago" millions of cars takeor " millions of commuters take cars" in the introduction? Are these both okay? Also, the subordinating conjunction materials, please? 5
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@zhanerkezeilbekova56473 years agoCan u make a video for reading? Please.
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@reiikarei66733 years agoThanks for the video! Anyways, i' m curious to know is there a maximum word count for task 2? Is it okay to exceed 300 words? 1
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@divyapatel60633 years agoIntroduction thesis lines will change, as well as conclusion for different type of essays. So how to write those lines in that kinda essay.
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@imgodson72203 years agoCan we use personal opinions in essays like we, i, our etc.
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@pskeditor24263 years agoThanx for writing essay below discretion.
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@lovemakes55983 years agoI have a doubt? Sir you have used (commuters ) word for almost 3-4 times so repeating 3 times doesn' t matter?
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@sarbjeetsingh57623 years agoYou are giving wrong thesis statement becauses your question was about advantages and disadvantages which means plural (2: 2 ratio question) how can we. ...Expand
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@rajvirsingh9353 years agoI was thinking that what if i don' t make any eye contact or even at the examiner to keep my confidence high so that i would be able to speak better. is it going to affect my bands if i do it?. ...Expand
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@manishadhikari57893 years agoBut the higher number of word count that is seen on the given 9 band essay can be a problem right? isn' t this misleading? I am also appearing in ielts exam very soon so i want to be clear on this.
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@shivamkaushal50993 years agoSir if there are several merits and demerits of any topic rhen how can i write its thesis statement?
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@manpreetkaur-fz3vu3 years agoSir 4 is my academic ielts exam but m not getting even 6 bands please help how can i embellish my reading i don' t understand anything i.
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@gitabenpansuriya44493 years agoI have done all this mistake and got only 6.
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@rexorangecounty57693 years agoIm sorry i couldnt help it but what are you trying to do with your beard?
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@randomshortvideos39243 years agoHello adrian sir i want see you ielts certificate to see how much band do you got.
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@Nitinverma973 years agoIs it ok to write first disadvantages and then advantages?
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@divyavarghese99213 years agoI really get confused whom to follow and whom to not.
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@minicomedyfamily43173 years agoIs the examiner examines the notes prepared by the students in task second. I' ll be thankful for getting answer.
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@navghuman46423 years agoThen what should be the thesis of agree disagree? Like this.
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@harshitagarwal78573 years agoI had ordered your writing feedback service but havent received any reply what so ever, this is not done no way to contact you guys very disappointed. 1
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@ZohairGotaandEdits3 years agoWhere are the conjunction i cant find them.
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@randomshortvideos39243 years agoSir can check speaking level where i stand.
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@punjabi77973 years agoSir please give me some tips for speaking. 1
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@phantomyash66493 years agoWhat about our opinion, do we need to mention like ' in my opinion'
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@baotran37403 years agoYour advice is extremely helpful sir but if everyone can see this, it would be commonly used by the candidates:
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@autumnleaves45533 years agoWatching this 15 days before my exam lol.
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@phantomknights3923 years agoSo basically the ielts is only tips and tricks, a way to get money from many peoples as you could.
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@itzmanik28383 years agoFirst of all be careful about your own english. It is full of serious grammatical errors.
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it would be better if you could show that what kind of linking words should be used in writing task 2. Instead of, on the one hand" on the otherect. 5
where can i find your list of subordinating conjunctions? 6
i have been struggling in getting a high writing mark since middle-school.
so i thought, going to high-school this video makes everything clear, these unrecognizable mistakes had imperceptibly dragged my marks down.
even though i have ok grammar, good amount of vocabulary, and a ton of ideas.
all i lacked was something that would glue them together to make an essay, a structure, a uniquestyle of writing.
this is what i have been looking for; some fresh air outside of my box, my comfort zone.
the essays in the description are great, but i need help analyzing.
could you please make a lesson on analyzing essays?
if you already posted a video please reply the link.
thank you in advance. ...Expand 1
you are the best ielts teacher i have ever seen. 4
please, do not get me wrong. I am a bit confused. Therefore, i asked. 22
i just want to know whether i can use " by way ofinstead of " in. Which is appropriate for high band?
just wanted to ask a question regarding the writing part 2. So point to be, to complete the task 2, i tried to write ' over there' . ...Expand
i didn' t get conjunction list in description.
is it good for high score?
also is it right to use in my mind instead of for instance. 1
isn' t this misleading? I am also appearing in ielts exam very soon so i want to be clear on this.
but m not getting even 6 bands
please help how can i embellish my reading
i don' t understand anything i.